“I’m happy for you, I really am” her voice cracked as she whispered into the phone.
“You were right. I need to make a clean start”. He admired the new, shiny, gold band on his finger.
She immediately prepared the mental checklist for the swift, emotional withdrawal she was about to initiate.
Go numb. Check.
“You were right. I need to make a clean start”. He admired the new, shiny, gold band on his finger.
She immediately prepared the mental checklist for the swift, emotional withdrawal she was about to initiate.
Go numb. Check.
posted by Mint Chutney at 7:36 AM
Mint Chutney
Chicago, United States
Wife, mother, corporate peon.
13 Comments:
*pling*
that's a broken heart, right there. quick, hide it before anyone sees the pieces!
oh god... i have to go away and cry now.
Oooh a sad one! Nicely done. Hope it was fiction.
nice one!
nice one minty..obviously short but not too sweet!
glad u had fun at disneyland =D
good one!
Very nicely written. I do hope that's fiction!
Neat. Tidy even.
And fiction or not, I guess ALL of us have a story very similar to that one to tell, in varying degrees of impact it had on our lives, but a similar story none the less...
Hey Mint! Coincidence- I did my 55 words yesterday too. The 'ex' factor features there too :)
A great 55-worder.
I wrote mine yesterday.. and got addicted. Did another one today :D
Nice! I did it on my blog too. Nothing as spectacular, though :(
Wander: Sometimes it shatters into so many pieces that there's no way to collect it all.
Grrl: It's ok Grrl. (hands you some tissue)
Jay and Lavi: : )
S and Gypsy : Thanks!
Sun, Casa, Gettingthere: I read all of yours and thought they were great. I love that so much can be expressed by 55 simple words.
MM: I did have fun. Thanks!
Stuti: It's all about self-preservation I suppose.
Wow - very nicely done!
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